Coooool, I like it. Needs crafting but it is written with an impressive strength. That said, if you over-refine a poem it can often lose some of the rough passion that is so apt in a peice like that.
Bravo to you, it's well done.
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quote: Originally posted by: Bloodline_Blue "Coooool, I like it. Needs crafting but it is written with an impressive strength. That said, if you over-refine a poem it can often lose some of the rough passion that is so apt in a peice like that. Bravo to you, it's well done."
thanks for the review dahl
i really apreciate it
and it needs a bit of work
was just really emotional when i wrote it
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