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Hannah_Molko


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It kinda totally resembles my past really, It'll have bad spelling and probebly Not be very good, but i just wrote it to get things out that i needed to express. 100 LINES


 


Liveing in lies

Take away the papers
Hang them to the walls
Colour them in black
cover them with shalls

Sing a song to them
Lighten their faces
fall into their arms
trip over your laces

shrug away the doubts
rip away the mask
away from the shouts
questions they will ask

Make a answer full of lies
and make it sound the truth
look into their waterd eyes
Smileing in their youth

Oh, how will we surrender
to the devils winning war
Women in white so slender
White turn to red in gore.

i have a sence of humor
a laugh so real and sick
Leaving all you sooner
and my memories seem to stick

Oh shall it be the last
the last time i see you
Shall this all end fast
for all the cuts i drew

please Laugh at me again
so i can tell you more
you are easing my pain
but leaveing my heart sore

for hours i sat on my bed
stared at the black drawing
showerd my thoughts in writeing
and left my tears pouring

These newlines written
In black fountain pen
roses black and wilting
untill they leave again

If you needed honesty
you really should have said
If you wanted modesty
look inside your head

You sang along with me
and took away my light
It was always I, not we
And you cant admit im right

the car light flattens the dark
and i smile with a dream
If i could leave a mark
I could also leave a scream

I could leave a picture in your mind
i could leave the sentance in your heart
i could leave paragraph inside
and then return back to the start

i think clearly about the things i say
and don't mumble like you always do
I don't act in an immature way
I never would be just like you

I arrive late almost every time
In my dream in a horrid state
and i am trying to clime
But i almost always arrive late

I could have took the short cut
and i could have made it
I always slame the door shut
and i'll always sit infront of it

I'm arrogant and selfish
i know who i am and why
i never had a choice
i never had a wish

i always had to do it right
everyone better than me
I was never the intelogent one
and noone could ever see

I could have ran away from it
Ran away from you all
i tryed it once before
But everytime i would fail

I'd give away a lifetime
Just to make you all proud
I'd kick, scream and shout
my sceams were never loud

worrying about myself again
and thinking about you all
i'd never could walk steady
and I'd find it hard to crawl

i was always ill as a child
Almost died before one
no worries have piled
someone shoot me with a gun

Liveing in an easy life
would be a dream come true
left in bitter strife
with nothing left to do

I'm never truly depressed
And never extaticly happy
always seem too strest
leave me alone, to be me



-- Edited by Hannah_Molko at 18:32, 2004-11-16

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i  like it, it's cool. very goth and loads of self expression

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thankyou

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that was brilliant. i could never write anything like that. you should be a poet. considered a creative writing course? its fantastic han, i really felt the emotion. it was a little unsettling but very artistic, symbolic and surreal. ***** - 5 stars from me!

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Thank you, im glad you guys like it..I'm deffiantly concidering taking a creative writing corse. Obviously hehe

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I love it hannah.. I love it.. it's just... great.. and.... and I can't find my words right now.. it's really perfect.

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"I love it hannah.. I love it.. it's just... great.. and.... and I can't find my words right now.. it's really perfect. "
Thankyoooou, do you think i should show my english teacher?

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"Thankyoooou, do you think i should show my english teacher?"

I'd say so..


..I can't write poetry and I'm in the Upper-Sixth, I should be able to really.


 



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I think they would be pretty amazed and impressed. Its rare that someone of your age (not to be patronising) is able to articulate as you have here! welldone!

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If you keep improving then you may go far, just don't lose the spark. I did, not quite sure why or how but I used to write avidly and I won a few competitions but now I just can't.


*sigh*


I have now, only the poetry of life.



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I should really do more writing. I think its good for you!

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Hmm, I just draw, that and blow things up..




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"BLOW things up"... really! Franz... is one girl not enough, that you feel you must bring in other methods of pleasure *raises eyebrows*

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Well I understand your jealousy at not being one of the other methods of pleasue but if you want to volunteer yourself then I'll get you the application form and put you on the waiting list.


Can't say fairer than that?


 



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Thanks for your opinions guys. i really need them, and i dont think i should show my english teacher because shes one of those people who look at poetry like that and think that the writers have probebly got problems... but i'll enter it in a compition if there is one

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yeah go for it!

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do you want to see some more of my poetry? because you can..


 


Here : http://www.freewebs.com/placeboandme/blackeyed.htm



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